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Iron Man Ted Hughes 4 Planning Sheets Year 6 Literacy
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Iron Man Ted Hughes 4 Planning Sheets Year 6 Literacy

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4 planning sheets. Plenty of ideas. Year 6. Literacy. Sample : Set up plenary clip at beginning of lesson to be played in plenary Imagination starter: display front cover of the Iron man on IWB – Tell pupils that we have a new topic surrounding the novel The Iron Man, and tell them we will find out more about the author and the story as the unit continues. Round Robin: Can you write down describing words about the character you see? Place pupils into A/B and give 2 minutes to write down ideas on wipeboards in pairs. Feedback with lollypop sticks to follow. Draw out discussion as to what genre the book might be/ if the character is good/evil. Read the first two pages to the class: Hands up: Does the opening make them want to read on? Why? Collect ideas on IWB- What is the effect of opening the story with questions? Explain that the author Ted Hughes was primarily a poet rather than author-so he plays with his words/sentence length a lot more. Note any important features of the text, which build up atmosphere and note on IWB. Choose an OPENERS card and set the class a challenge. As core, but once they have completed highlighting, pupils are to label similes, metaphors, alliteration, repetition, rhetorical questions, short sentences… Can I analyse the features of a good story opening and find poetic devices? Children are given a copy of the first 2 pages of The Iron Man to annotate. They highlight what parts of the text build up the atmosphere to make a good opening –and how this contributes to he overall style. Can I analyse the features of a good story opening? Support lower going over each section of the text together. Read through again if necessary. Can I analyse the features of a good story opening, with support?
Poetry Imagery Planning Year 6 English Literature Imagery and Personification
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Poetry Imagery Planning Year 6 English Literature Imagery and Personification

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Great planning for year 6. Two weeks worth. Nice powerpoints. Sample : Introduce the new unit and writing outcome. Read the poem ‘Fog’ by Carl Sandberg together. Write ‘personification’ on the board and discuss what this means. TTYP – what might it mean? Agree on a definition for the working wall: Giving human traits to non-human or abstract things. Or making a non-human thing do things that only a human can do. Explain the phrase ‘inanimate object’. Give out copies of ‘Two Sunflowers Move in a Yellow Room’ by William Blake. Discuss how the sunflowers are given human characteristics – they talk, they feel tired, they want a room with a view! Return to the poem Fog. In this, it is almost as if Fog is alive – either human or possibly feline (cat-like). Look again at ‘Two Sunflowers Move in a Yellow Room. ’Underline the words ‘topaz tortoises’. Ask children what these last lines mean? Discuss whether it matters if we are not sure of the exact meaning of all the words in a poem. Why might it not matter? Because it is the sound and the rhythm of the words which is as important as their meaning in a poem. Look up topaz to find its meaning. Does this help us understand what the last two lines mean?
Year 1 planning Maths and English from Excellent school Back to school
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Year 1 planning Maths and English from Excellent school Back to school

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Planning for year one I’ve gathered from my log career. Mainly Maths and English but other stuff too. Zip has loads. I’ve put a sample in general download. Read the story ‘We’re going on a Bear Hunt’ Talk about the main events and make a list of the characters on the IWB. Introduce the term setting and discuss what a setting is. Identify all the different settings in the story and make a list on the IWB. Make links with the children’s own experiences eg who has walked through long grass? Diamond/ Ruby H/A (Ind) Children to complete worksheet identifying main characters, setting and event (HA sheet) Children to complete worksheet drawing favourite setting, identifying main characters, and explaining what happened. (SD to support) Children to complete worksheet drawing favourite setting, identifying main characters, and explaining what happened. (BM to support)
Year 6 Grammar Resources plus Reading and Homework Ideas
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Year 6 Grammar Resources plus Reading and Homework Ideas

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Gathered together a lot of my teaching material. Packed full of stuff that you can use for Spag, Grammar, homework =, reading session etc. Everthing is in the zip. I have put a few examples in the general upload. Sample ideas : • Pick a descriptive word from the text, write it down and, using a thesaurus, write down five synonyms and antonyms for that word. • Re-read a chapter – pick out X number of words that you feel are powerful words and that you could use in your own writing • How does the story hook you in at the beginning? Make a list of words and phrases that you feel are effective in making you want to read on. • Draw and label a character or a setting from a description in the book. • Choose a descriptive passage and make a list of examples of vivid imagery – similes, metaphors, alliteration, noun phrases etc. • Choose a key moment in the book and change the event. Re-write the following chapter… • Rewrite a chapter as a playscript. • Think of 5 questions you would like to ask one of the characters. Swap these with someone else in your group and write the answers as if you were that character. • List the words and phrases used to create an atmosphere, such as ‘scary’ or ‘spookiness’ ‘tension’ ‘relaxed’ • Write about what a character might be thinking or feeling at different stages of the story. You could write it in the first person, or in a speech bubble. • Predict what might happen when you are about halfway through a book. Write your prediction in the form of a story plan in boxes
SEAL PSHE Year 5 and 6 Planning Well Being Week Multi Faith Anti Bullying
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SEAL PSHE Year 5 and 6 Planning Well Being Week Multi Faith Anti Bullying

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Did a lot of work in my career with year 5 and 6 in the aspect of PSHE SEAL etc. Gathered together my planning. Some good powerpoints in here. There’s planning for a Multi Faith week that covers the whole school. Well being week covers the whole school too. Topics tackeld include : healthy eating feelings new beginnings getting on and falling out going for goals relationships problem solving going for goals sample planning Objectives • I know that my relationships are all different and that different ways of behaving are appropriate to different types of relationships. • I can accept and appreciate people’s friendship and try not to demand more than they are able or wish to give. Activities Ask the children to think of as many different friends as they can (in and out of school), then to think about the following questions for a few moments, then to share their thoughts in pairs for 2 minutes. Do you like all your friends in the same way? • Do you like doing the same thing with all of your friends? • Do you tend to see some friends only in certain situations? • Would you want to see all of your friends all the time? Take feedback, and hold these ideas. Teacher to demonstrate Levels of Friendship circles on the board, starting in the centre with close friends and family, second circle –good friends/cousins etc, third circle, third circle –people in school/relatives you see rarely, fourth circle –people who are acquaintances or know slightly –postman, doctor etc. Give out copies of the Levels of friendship resource sheet and ask children to complete the sheet for themselves. They will not need to share it with anyone. Plenary When the children have finished, or the allocated time has elapsed, facilitate a brief discussion as a class, drawing out the point that we all tend to have friendships at different levels, and this is OK. We do not want to be best friends with all of our friends. Some of us have many friends, some prefer to have one close friend. Outcomes Children will recognise the different relationships that they have with people that they know, and recognise that these differing relationships are fine to have.
Beowulf Teaching Materials Planning Powerpoints Anglo-Saxons Poetry Year 6 Literacy
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Beowulf Teaching Materials Planning Powerpoints Anglo-Saxons Poetry Year 6 Literacy

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You get 48 files. Include a dozen powerpoints. All in zip. Some in the genr=eral upload. Some nice free bonus stuff on History, jewellery and ship making. Sample L.O. To use knowledge of quest myths and the Vikings to create a character profile for the main character and hero of our own Viking quest myth story. I can use my knowledge of quest myths and the Vikings to create a character profile for the main character and hero for my own Viking quest myth story. Beowulf Lesson 4 STARTER – adjectives Look at text and highlight in pairs adjectives that describe Beowulf, then using post –it notes in pairs, begin to generate more words form pictures displayed on the IWB of Beowulf in various positions/battles and write some of their own powerful adjectives. These can then be ‘magpied’ by the children during the independent work. Main activity Hot seating – Beowulf and the King Use the questions generated on Wednesday as interview questions. Choose children that would like to play those parts – use a sword and shield if we have one This will hopefully give the children an idea as to what these main characters are like, their personality and how they think and react to different situations that happen in the story. Teacher to explain/demonstrate how the profile needs to be complete. Discuss what the words – appearance and personality mean and how they are different. Independent work Character profile – Beowulf the hero of their quest myths Using ‘My Viking Quest Myth Ideas Planning Booklet’ create a character profile for their Beowulf hero by labeling the picture, answering the questions in detail and adding descriptive words and phrases to describe his personality and appearance. Plenary Discuss the difference between appearance and personality of a character and what does it mean by special qualities? Because he isn’t a super hero!
Classic and Narrative Poems The Highwayman Alfred Noyes Planning
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Classic and Narrative Poems The Highwayman Alfred Noyes Planning

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Lots of powerpoints and planning for this Classic poem. Sample planning : Genre: Poetry Unit 2 – Classic/Narrative poems. Focus Texts: ‘The Highwayman’ by Alfred Noyes. ‘Maggie and the Dinosaur’ by Dave Ward. ‘The Works’ (poetry anthology) by Paul Cookson. ‘The Puffin book of utterly brilliant poetry’ (Anthology) edited by Brian Patten. Objectives Primary Framework 7. Make notes on and use evidence from across a text to explain events or ideas 7. Compare different types of narrative and information texts and identify how they are structured 7. Explore how writers use language for comic and dramatic effects 8. Compare the usefulness of techniques such as visualisation, prediction and empathy in exploring the meaning of texts 3. Understand the process of decision making Learning/Writing outcome: Investigate the structure of narrative poetry. Compose an extra verse to a classic poem. Work as part of a group to perform a poem and to evaluate performances. LO: Whole Class Shared Learning Guided and Independent Activities: Plenary: T Read and investigate a narrative poem. Prepare to share a narrative poem from an anthology: Maggie & the Dinosaur, p463 in The Works by Paul Cookson. Explain that an Anthology is a collection of poems specially chosen by a person: an anthologist. Highlight that Narrative poems are poems which tell a story. Point out that not all narrative poems have the same structure although each poem will probably have its own! They often have many verses just like a song, with each verse telling the next part of the story. Ask the children to respond to the narrative poem we shared. Which parts, lines & words did they enjoy the most? Did they like the way that the poem was read? Narrative poems are often long so they need to be read in a way that keeps the audience interested from start to finish. Just like a good story reader would make a story sound interesting. Children to be split into mixed ability groups of four and given copies of two poems:
Back to School Science  Year 5 Healthy Eating Scurvy Worksheet Powerpoints
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Back to School Science Year 5 Healthy Eating Scurvy Worksheet Powerpoints

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8 powerpoints and 4 word documents. Nice scurvy worksheet. Fun games on Science. Sample planning below. You get a lot more in full product. Begin by discussing ‘science’ with the class. What do they think of the subject? Can they name any important scientific skills? Introduce topic and ask children what they think the word ‘health’ means. Talk with talk partners. Children to find definition in dictionary and write class definition on strips of paper for display wall. Lead into a class discussion on keeping healthy; can the children predict what sorts of topics we might we might be covering? Can the HA children predict what SC1 investigations we might be carrying out? Introduce children to the resources which will be available to help them during this topic; the working wall plus table mats. Explain that each science topic will have a topic page and a glossary. This glossary gives the definitions of important vocabulary which they will come across during the unit. Activity One Children to feed back and complete class prior knowledge map. (Even if facts are not correct, add them on and clear up misconceptions throughout unit.) Children could add to their own map in a different colour any facts they have not got, which their peers suggest. Plenary Children to write some questions they would like us to find out during topic. Add to display and ensure they inform further planning. Homework: Children to bring in food labels for next lesson. Explain that we are going to look at the affect of our diet (what we eat) on our health and growth. Ask the class, What are your favourite foods? What foods would you eat all the time if you could? Ascertain that it might not be a good idea to live on just a few foods such as chips and that we need a variety of foods in order to function properly. Scan in some food labels. Display the food labels that the children should have brought in from home. What information do we find on the labels? Make a list of some of the key words on the labels. Why do manufacturers put information on food?
Christmas Year 6 Planning With Emphasis on Comparison of Gospels
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Christmas Year 6 Planning With Emphasis on Comparison of Gospels

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Great planning. Powerpoints and worksheets plus a week plan. sample planning : Ask children to think about their literacy lessons – TTYP and name the important details that are needed in telling a story (e.g. time, place, characters and events). Ask children to the recall names of the four main Gospels. Do they all tell the same story? (Essentially yes but lead children towards idea that they are different versions of the same story). Use analogy of an incident occurring on the playground – would each child tell the same incident in the same way? No they would tell their version of the same event – some details and word choices would differ. Talk about today’s WALT and explain that we are going to be looking at some different Gospel accounts of the birth of Jesus Christ. Explain to ch that, in order to achieve their WALT, they will need to be comparing and contrasting everything which they read. Explain briefly that three out of the four Gospels deal with the birth or Christ; there are many similarities and many differences in the way in which the Gospels record and explain the event. For today’s lesson we are going to focus on Matthew’s Gospel and Luke’s Gospel. Discuss possible reasons for the differences in the two accounts. They are coming from two different people; points of view; written at different times but the basic story is the same. Briefly recap last lesson. Which two Gospels did we look at? Which story were we reading? Did both Gospels tell the story in exactly the same way? Refer to the list which was made in the plenary last lesson - which other characters were involved in the Christmas story? Re-read the story of the birth of Jesus in Matthew’s Gospel. Continue to read until Chapter 2 verse 12. Why did the message of Jesus’ birth first come to shepherds rather than King Herod? Why did Herod want to get rid of Jesus? What words would you use to describe the threat that this baby was to Herod? What do you think led men to come from the east by the light of a star to find this child? Herod assumed the King of the Jews sought by the wise men was a conventional king and thus a rival to his throne. TTYP – what were the names of the three gifts which the wise men brought to the baby Jesus? Briefly recap the unit so far. Who are the main characters in the Christmas story? Which two Gospel accounts of the birth of Christ have we looked at? What are the similarities and differences between them? Share the WALT and explain that this lesson will focus on the birth of Christ according to St John’s Gospel. Explain that in St. John’s Gospel there is no account of the birth of Christ, but there is a poem at the beginning that speaks about him. Use PPT to explain a prologue.
Christmas 2 Powerpoints Plus the Feast of the Epiphany
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Christmas 2 Powerpoints Plus the Feast of the Epiphany

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Two great powerpoints and some planning. Nice powerpoint on Epiphany. Sample : Share the new targets with the children and explain that this is a short unit – two double lessons. Read the story of Jesus’ birth from Matthew’s Gospel – Mt 1: 18-2: 23. Who are the main characters in this story? Concentrate on Mary, Joseph and King Herod. Talk through the story. God had promised a saviour to free us all from our sins and he sent His only son into the world for us. Talk about the priorities for any family when a baby is expected. (safety and comfort of the mother) . Activity One Come back together and watch scene featuring King Herod. Fear gripped King Herod, his mighty power was threatened. He gathered all the chief priests and scribes to see what they knew – they confirmed that Bethlehem had been foretold by the prophets. Herod launched his plan to locate the baby so that he could destroy him. What was Herod’s mistake? (look for the children to understand that Herod thought that Jesus would be an earthly King with a throne and a crown who was overthrow Herod). What were Mary and Joseph’s feelings about the birth of the baby? Do you think they were scared? Happy? Relieved? Children to TTYP and discuss – What does the birth of Jesus mean for us? Jesus truly God and truly human has come down to Earth. He brings peace, love and true freedom to those who seek him. He opens the way to heaven for us. He has come to save all people. What does the birth of Jesus teach us? God seeks those with an open heart to receive him. If you truly seek God, He will find you. It’s not money, wealth or knowledge that matters because God seeks the lowly and the humble who are looking for Him.
Short Christmas Play Ideal for Assembly The Story of Christmas Year 4 Assembly
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Short Christmas Play Ideal for Assembly The Story of Christmas Year 4 Assembly

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A nice play for a Christmas assembly. About 12 pages. Sample : Part 1: KIRA - Narrator 1: The time leading up to Christmas is a busy one, and sometimes we can forget what the message of good news it brings. We would like you to imagine that this good news event is being broadcast to you today, live! EMILY - Narrator 2: Our report, and the beginning of Christianity, is set in Nazareth. In the town, Jewish families were living under Roman occupation. These families had become poor due to King Herod’s heavy taxes. Nearly all the money the Jews earned went to Herod and the Romans so that they could afford new weapons and lovely food and clothes. RICKY - Narrator 3: In the town lived a very religious Jewish family: the daughter of this family was called Mary. When Mary was about 14 years old she became engaged to Joseph, a talented carpenter. SONG: Nazareth (NATIVITY) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uNDcWruJ4IY Things are really cool in Nazareth. Our city is full of joy, Cause this is where girl meets boy. Barely had a school in Nazareth. There they join hand in hand, side by side, they will stand. A wedding is being planned. Here in Nazareth. Nazareth our place to live. Always willing to forgive. Nazareth will bring us well. We can hear those wedding bells. Feeling in a fix in Nazareth. Rules are to be obeyed, Arrangements are being made. Got to get your kicks in Nazareth Baby, you’ll run away Start at a brand new day Still we can not betray Good old Nazareth.” <Play news theme – Have playing on a screen during broadcast?> http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rj5Rc60fJ2M ASHTON - Newsreader 1: Hello. And welcome to this breaking news update. We begin our report with the news of wedding preparations that are under way for Mary and Joseph who are pledged to be married. Tonight, however, Mary was woken from a deep sleep by a gentle voice.
Advent Lesson Religious Education Year 5
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Advent Lesson Religious Education Year 5

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A great lesson for the season of advent. sample planning : Begin the lesson by sharing the learning objective with the children. Give each table two different coloured post it notes and ask the children to write what they already know about advent, on one coloured post it, and anything that they would like to know about advent on the other. Children to share ideas and keep post its. If the question is not answered in the lesson they should put it in their RE book to inform the next RE lesson’s teaching. CT and children to discuss the liturgical seasons of the year. What are they? How many are there? What is the first season of the liturgical year? Do we use colour with the liturgical seasons? Ask the children to work on netbooks to research the meaning of the word Advent. Can they find out which language the word originates from? What does it mean? http://projectbritain.com/Advent.html Bring the children back together and ask them to feedback their findings to create a class mindmap. Children to then draw and complete a mind map in their books illustrating what they already know about the liturgical season of Advent. Explore the duel meaning of the season: to prepare for the birthday of Jesus and to prepare for Jesus to come again. Set up prayer partners for the period of advent
Safeguarding Awareness week SEAL PSHE  Relationships Bullying
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Safeguarding Awareness week SEAL PSHE Relationships Bullying

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One thing I enjoyed teaching was SEAL material. I taught in a number of primary schools and have gathered all my stuff together. Covers all years but especially years 4 5 and 6. You get absolutely loads in the zip. I’ve uploaded a few powerpoints for you to look at. Loads of topics covered such as health, relationships, bullying etc
Year 5 Literacy and Maths Planning
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Year 5 Literacy and Maths Planning

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Gathered together my lessons for year 5 Maths and English for a particular year. There’s about a year’s worth in there. Plenty of great ideas. the zip has the lot. the general download a few to have a look at. Sample planning : Start by showing the word ‘Instructions’ – TTYP what does this mean? Come back together and establish that instructions are a set of commands given to help someone do or create something. Show the children a recipe and the instructions as to how to play Sevens using cards. Look at the instructions. What do children notice about how these are laid out? They are given in an order. They are bullet-pointed. Each sentence is fairly short. There are many ‘bossy’ verbs: ‘place’, ‘play’, ‘turn’ etc. Explain that we call these ‘imperative’ verbs – an imperative is a command. Discuss why it is helpful to have ‘bossy’ verbs and short clear sentences. There is a title which tells you what is to be achieved. Numbers or time connectives used e.g. 1, 2, 3 or later, next - are used to show chronological order. Create a features list on the working wall by sticking post it notes onto a piece of sugar paper –these can be used throughout the unit as a game to start the lesson. Divide the class into three teams. Deal out seven cards to each team and the teacher! Play a little of the game of sevens, following the instructions. Demonstrate how we can follow the instructions to play. Return to features of instructions displayed on working wall. What can you remember about these? Children turn to a partner and tell them 3 different features. Report back & discuss. Show children the instructions checklist (working wall). Have we mentioned all of these features? Ask children to think of a new idea for a card game. Use a talking partner & brainstorm a game idea on whiteboards. Gather everyone’s ideas/discuss the concepts. Pick one idea. Decide how many players we will need & how to play it. Allow children time with talking partners to practice playing the game. Ask some children to demonstrate. How will we write the instructions? What comes first? (Title, subheading.) What is our first instruction? Repeat for a few more sentences.
Year 2 Planning Literacy and Maths
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Year 2 Planning Literacy and Maths

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Gathered my lessons for year 2 together. Mainly Literacy and Maths plus bits and bobs. In the zip you find the lot. Included some examples in general upload. Sample planning : Read the traditional tale LRRH, recap ‘good’ central character/villain. Concentrate on the attitude, not words. What would happen if we reversed the characteristics? S&L Children discuss how a ‘good’ wolf might behave towards LRRH/Granny. Teacher draw children back together. Model how to ‘tell’ story of wolf from new pictures. Word/Sentence Activities IWB available for quick phonic session. YEAR 2 LITERACY LESSON PLAN WEDNESDAY Whole Class Shared Learning Return to the traditional tale of LRRH. Remind children about their previous day’s pictures. What did they do? How did they change the Wolf? Is he still the villain? S&L Ask the children to look at their pictures as you read story extracts with his dialogue. Encourage them to discuss dialogue with a partner. Do the pictures and words make sense together? As a class, agree that the Wolf needs new words. Discuss what he might say. Model how to write words for a speech bubble. Word/Sentence Activities Rehearse spellings for Word Wall words. Challenge children to find other words with same phonemes
Year 3 Literacy and Maths Planning
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Year 3 Literacy and Maths Planning

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Gathered my lessons for year 3 together. Mainly Literacy and Maths plus bits and bobs. In the zip you find the lot. Included some examples in general upload. Sample planning : Introduction Explain will be looking at different ways of writing poetry using special words and shapes as stimulus. ‘calligram’ means beautiful writing. Show examples. S&L Children discuss with response partner why they think words are presented in these ways. Teacher draw children back together. After discussion, ask children to choose most effective calligram, justifying choice. Draw out understanding that the meaning of words inspires the shapes in a calligram. Teacher demonstrate use of ICT programs to produce calligrams and own drawing as alternative. Draw up a list of suitable words for choices. Word/Sentence Activities Use IWB store range of suitable words for calligrams. Can children classify word types: nouns, adjectives, adverbs etc. YEAR 3 LITERACY LESSON PLAN 16th Monday Whole Class Shared Learning Before reading; ask the children what they think ‘Autumn’ poem will look like. Show poem. Ask them to decide where you should begin reading and then read the poem. Read two more examples of shape poems. Add appropriate actions. Class repeat. S&L Encourage the children to say how similar and different the three poems are. Invite them to say which poem is most effective visually. Which poem do they prefer? Discuss why the poets have chosen these shapes, and how the shape affects the content of the poems. Practice with RP saying preferred poem aloud. Word/Sentence Activities Rehearse spellings for Word Wall words. Challenge children to find other words with same phonemes
Year 4 Literacy and Maths Planning
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Year 4 Literacy and Maths Planning

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Gathered together my planning for year 4. Mainly Literacy and Maths. Spread over a number of years. You get 690 files. The zip has the lot. I’ve put some in the general download to give yoiu a flavour. Sample planning : Explain to chn that this work for this unit will be based on stories set in imaginary worlds. The Borrowers by Mary Norton is set in a miniature world under the floorboards in an old house. Have chn read any other books (or seen films) set in imaginary worlds, eg Harry Potter, The Chronicles of Narnia, Star Wars, The Lord of the Rings, etc. These are fantasy settings that authors have created in their minds, as maps or as drawings, etc. Tolkien drew maps for The Hobbit & The Lord of the Rings, Mary Norton used small everyday objects as furniture and tools, and J K Rowling had the idea for Harry Potter when on a long & boring train journey. Read 2 versions of the same setting one without some details, description & adjectives and the other in full. After the first reading ask chn if they can picture the classroom clearly in their heads, then ask the same question after the full extract and compare answers. How is the light described? Dim & crimson. How would the atmosphere in the room change if the adjectives used were yellow and bright? Word sentence level Remind chn that an adjective is a word that describes somebody/thing. They come before nouns or after verbs such as: be, get, seem, look, eg the frail old woman or she looked old and frail. Overuse of adjectives is as bad as not using any! Show class a passage which adjectives could be removed from this passage? Which are most effective adjectives to be left in the passage?